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How are things going? In your last letter you talked about low carbon life. Now I’d like to share my understanding of it and my experience in the past few months. With the environment problem coming into attention, it is extremely important that we take action to protect our planet. As more people are determined to make a difference, low carbon lifestyle provides us with the perfect opportunity to do it. Interestingly, our school called on us students to develop a low carbon lifestyle and become a responsible citizen several months ago. In response to the eal, I he made some changes in my way of life, which range from transportation to water sing. For example, instead of asking my parents to drive me to school, I take a bus to and from school. Just like my schoolmates, I now refuse to use disposable chopsticks. At home, I even persuade my parents to reuse water, even though it is not so convenient. The TV and the computer are important entertainment for my family, but we sometimes read instead, which, I think, may help relieve the shortage of electricity. I’m really glad to communicate with you about this topic. Yours, LiHua |
| 试题分析：本文是一篇材料作文，题干虽然所提供的内容比较多，但是实际给出的要点却比较少，其开放程度同样较大。不过考生对此话题非常熟悉，写起来有话可说。题干内容多，给考生带来处理要点的难度，因此写好本篇书面表达的关键是：选择要点，挖掘要点和正确表达。题干所提供的内容比较多，在表达时无需面面俱到，这就要根据题干选择我们表达时必须的要点：围绕“对低碳生活的理解、学校开展的活动、最近生活方式的改变”等三个方面结合“做有责任的公民，过低碳生活”去挖掘要点。本篇书面表达的基本时态为现在时(一般现在时和现在完成时)。偶尔会用到一般过去时，如：提及学校组织的活动时就要用到。但是接着讲“最近生活方式的改变”时，就要用现在范畴的时态了。 亮点说明范文长句多，充分展示了作者驾驭句子的能力。复合句固然长，但是简单句也显得不那么简单，也比较长。比如“For example, instead of asking my parents to drive me to school, I take a bus to and from school.”就达20个字。全文共8句(不包括所给的部分)，涉及简单句3个，复合句5个，开头句和最后依据非常吸引人的眼球。开头句中用了“with”复合结构“With the environment problem coming into attention”，还用了非常靓丽的复合句 “it is extremely important that we take action to protect our planet”.最后一句更是错综复杂：总体说，这是一个复合句，由主句“The TV and the computer are important entertainment for my family, but we sometimes read instead”加“which”引导的非限制性定语从句“which, I think, may help relieve the shortage of electricity”；主句中包含了并列句“but we sometimes read instead”；该句中还用了一个插入语“I think”对整个长句起到了缓冲的作用。短语“make a difference，In response to，range from transportation to water sing”等的使用也彰显了作者扎实的语言基本功。 |
1、 同一个世界，同一个梦想，同一个家园，同一个渴望，同一片蓝天，同一片海洋，同为了和平，同为了安康。保护环境，从低碳做起。
2、 低碳生活，能够节约地球;低碳生活，能够调节气候回升;低碳生活，能够创造美好明天!爱护地球母亲，创造精神家园!
3、 我爱我的家园，因为那里碧水蓝天，我爱我的家园，因为那里风光无限，我爱我的家园，因为那里享受低碳。低碳生活，美妙世界。
4、 乌烟瘴气的蓝天，河水里污染泛滥。究竟是什么样的污染源，污染了我们美好的明天。为了地球母亲的笑颜，为了子孙还有美好的世间。让我们实行低碳生活，让幸福永绵绵。
5、 电子产品分类回收，减少电子垃圾污染，降解可分解物质，低碳生活你我先行。
6、 小时候老师带你去种的一棵小树你可还记得，现在肯定郁郁葱葱了，多种些树吧，让你我快乐，让你我健康。
7、 低碳环保节能灯，节能远胜白织灯，不光发光效率高，而且使用寿命长，适用电压很宽广，灯光白亮显色好，家庭推广节能灯，省电省钱又低碳!
8、 多走两步路吧，少开两次车吧，快捷是要代价的，生命的路不是很长，走的越快，终点越近。
9、 低碳环保政策好，全民一起搞一搞，节水节电节能耗，低碳生活快实现。
1． 低碳经济，即low-carbon economy。网络百科全书维基百科收录有low-carbon economy词条，其篇首第一句话如下：A Low-Carbon Economy (LCE) or Low-Fossil-Fuel Economy (LFFE) is a concept that refers to an economy which has a minimal output of greenhouse gas (GHG) emissions into the biosphere, but specifically refers to the greenhouse gas carbon dioxide.值得说明的是，虽然目前网络搜索结果显示，“低碳”的英文有的写成low carbon，有的写成low-carbon，但总体上说还是使用连字符号的居多，如美联社12月7日关于哥本哈根联合国气候变化大会召开的新闻报道中有这么一句话：On the sidelines, climate activists competed for attention to their campaigns on deforestation, clean energy and low-carbon growth。
2． 碳足迹，即carbon footprint。简单地说，碳足迹是用来衡量我们在日常生活中消耗的二氧化碳的一种方式。无论是开车上班、乘飞机旅行，还是使用电灯、电脑，我们都消耗石油、煤和天然气等化石燃料。这些化石燃料在燃烧时，会排放出诸如二氧化碳之类导致地球变暖的温室气体。对于carbon footprint，维基百科有如下定义：A carbon footprint is "the total set of greenhouse gas (GHG) emissions caused by an organization, event or product". For simplicity of reporting, it is often expressed in terms of the amount of carbon dioxide, or its equivalent of other GHGs, emitted. 相关表达见如下例句：A new purpose-built office complex that will offer eco-friendly accommodation across 66,250 square feet is under construction in Wales. It is reported that the Cardiff Waterside project, entitled 3 Assembly Square, forms part of a140 million construction project and will aim to offer business in the area an environment that has a lower carbon footprint than traditional office space. 上述句子的背景是，英国成立了一个The Low Carbon Building Programme (LCBP)，即低碳建筑，维基百科解释说，LCBP is a Government programme in the United Kingdom administered by BERR (formerly the DTI). It offers grants towards the cost of installing domestic microgeneration technologies and larger scale distributed generation installations for public buildings and businesses, provided energy conservation standards are also met.
3． 低碳技术，即low-carbon technology，这是发展低碳经济，倡导低碳生活的关键之关键，相关例句如下：The Carbon Trust today launched a new 10m pounds low carbon technology investment joint venture to help UK companies develop new low carbon technologies in China. The new joint venture is a partnership with the Carbon Trust and the China Energy Conservation Investment Corporation (CECIC) to develop and deploy low carbon technologies in China.专家指出，低碳技术将成为国家核心竞争力的一个标志——谁掌握了先进的低碳技术，谁就拥有了核心竞争力。低碳技术的面很广，大的技术类型包括节能技术、无碳和低碳能源技术、二氧化碳捕捉与埋存技术，还包括人类可以利用、可以展望到的低碳技术，如核能、风能、太阳能、生物质能、二氧化碳捕捉埋存等相关技术，其中的关键词就是低碳能源（low-carbon energy），如The world will need to spend an additional $10.5 trillion in the next two decades on energy efficiency and low-carbon energy to oid runaway climate change, according to the International Energy Agency (IEA)。
4． 低碳发展，即low-carbon development/growth，经济发展的一种全新概念与模式。请看如下句子：China has issued a report saying the country is expected to realize by 2050 a low carbon development, featuring low energy demand and carbon dioxide output.
5． 低碳生活方式，即low-carbon lifestyle，检索发现，这一词语已成为网络新宠，这是因为我国的大都市已经诞生了“低碳一族”，他们每天使用传统的发条闹钟，取代电子闹钟；在午休和下班后关掉电脑和平板显示器；一旦不用电灯、空调，随手关掉；手机一旦充电完成，立即拔掉充电插头；选择晾晒衣物，避免使用滚筒式干衣机；用在附近公园中的慢跑取代在跑步机上的45分钟锻炼；用节能灯替换60瓦的灯泡；不开汽车改骑自行车……简而言之，“低碳生活”方式可以理解为减低二氧化碳的排放，就是低能量、低消耗、低开支的生活方式。而“低碳一族”正以自己生活细节的改变证明：气候变化已经不再只是环保主义者、官员和专家学者关心的问题，而是与我们每个人息息相关。在提倡健康生活已成潮流的今天，“低碳生活”不再只是一种理想，更是一种值得期待的新的生活方式！相关英语表达见如下例句：（1）A one-year carbon emission reduction program proposed by China's Ministry of Environmental Protection (MEP) was started here Wednesday, on World Earth Day, to encourage citizens nationwide to adjust their lifestyle and live a "low-carbon" lifestyle. A low-carbon lifestyle covers many aspects of modern life, such as transportation, home heating, and holiday trel, which can be conducted in a way that gives the maximum reduction of personal carbon emissions. /（2）As the Copenhagen Climate Conference is drawing near, more and more debate about low-carbon lifestyle come forth. /（3）Just this year, the low-carbon lifestyle, or Lifestyle of Health and Sustainability (LOHAS), suddenly became trendy in China, particularly among young urbanites, Lin said. 与“低碳生活方式”相关的说法还有“低碳生活”，即low-carbon life，相关搭配就是lead a low-carbon life，如://.lowcarbonlife.net/网站就专门介绍各种低碳生活的小贴士。因为“低碳经济”提出的大背景是全球气候变暖对人类生存和发展的严峻挑战，因此，“低碳生活方式”还可以表达为 climate-friendly lifestyles，见://.edf.org/page.cfm?tagID=20927网站，该网站介绍了低碳生活的三大贴士（Tips for a Healthy, Low-Carbon Life），有兴趣的读者不妨一读。
| Last week a survey concerning low-carbon life was carried out among 300 students in our school．When asked about their attitude to this lifestyle, a majority of 83% show support．In a bid to preserve the limited amount of resources, they take measures such as going to school by public transportation, sing as much water and electricity as possible in daily life, and using environmentally-friendly / reusable / recyclable bags instead of plastic ones for shopping．Yet the remaining 17% seem rather indifferent and reluctant to adjust their current lifestyle to cut carbon emission．In their opinion, the effort of an individual is just too small to count．However, when these single efforts accumulate into a collective force, it will be significant enough for real improvements, so I hope more people can live a low-carbon life to protect the earth． |
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| One possible version: My Low-carbon Life My name is Li Ming. I am a middle school student. I go to school on foot every day. I always remember to turn off the lights, the TV and the fans when I lee the classroom. When I am not using water, I always turn off the tap. I often reuse water, for example, when I finish washing the clothes, I use the water to clean the floor and water flowers. I never use plastic bags. I think sing paper is necessary, so I often make full use of paper. It’s important for us to live a low-carbon life to protect the environment. |
| 书面表达评分标准： 1．?评分时先根据短文内容和语言表达，初步确定其所属档次，然后根据该档次的要求衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。 2．?本大题满分为15分，不设小数点以下分值。按五个档次给分。 3．?文中若出现真实的人名、校名，扣2分。
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| One possible version A voluntary activity Last Sunday, our class launched a voluntary activity. Its theme is to make the city more beautiful and advocate a low-carbon lifestyle. In the morning, we went to plant trees in the suburbs. We worked in cooperation. Some dug holes, some carried and planted trees, and some watered them. In the afternoon, we went to People’s Square to hand out leaflets, raising people’s awareness of environmental protection. Most of the students think highly of the activity, which will surely produce a positive effect on their daily life. As far as I’m concerned, it’s everyone’s duty to protect the environment. As long as there is the possibility of sing our planet, take action now before it is too late. Low carbon living is surely a way of great significance.（120词） |
| 试题分析：本文是篇材料作文，材料具有鲜明的时代特色，学生很容易把握写作要求和写作目的。考生在写作之前必修认真审题，首先要注意文章的时态，上周日，你班开展以“美化城市环境，倡导低碳生活”为宗旨的志愿者活动。活动内容包括：上午去郊区植树；下午去广场宣传，分发传单。请你就这个活动为校报写一篇120个左右词的短文。所以要用一般过去时；人称应该用第一人称we注意字数的要求。同时还要注意不能根据材料逐字逐句的翻译应该注意句子的衔接，以提高作文的档次。 亮点说明文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，比如think highly of ，as far as I’m concerned，as long as，take action，还运用了动词的不定式形式作表语，非谓语的-ing形式做状语，which引导的非限制性定语从句等等。 |
| （1）In order to protect our environment and advocate a low carbon lifestyle, an activity will be organized by the Students’ Union of our school from July 14 to July 18. （2）During the activity, we will clean the playground and water the trees and flowers. （3）What’s more, we will collect waste paper, old books, empty cans and old toys, which will be sorted before being sent to the recycling center. （4）To live a low-carbon life, we should switch off all electric liances and water taps when they are not in use and use less plastic bags and disposable products. （5）Besides, it is better for us to take a bus or walk to school. |
| 试题分析：这是一篇围绕“保护环境，低碳生活”的主题英语倡议书。倡议对象的称呼已写好。接着是写节约的具体措施。主要包括：?打扫操场, 给植物浇水；收集旧报纸、 旧书、空罐头盒、废玩具, 分类后送交回收中心；?在餐厅就餐时怎样节约粮食；及时关闭电器电源，节约用水，少用塑料包装袋和一次性商品和多乘坐公交车或步行上学四部分内容。结尾要表示发出号召和希望。最后也可以写上发倡议者的名称。 倡议书的写作，先写对发出倡议对象的称呼。2、正文：（1）写清楚发出此倡议的原因或目的。只有交代清楚倡议活动的目的、意义即重要性，倡议对象才能理解、才能取自觉的行动来响应，否则就很难响应，起不到倡议应有的作用。（2）重点是写倡议的具体内容和要求及要求做到的具体事项。这部分一般是分条开列，以求清晰、明确。（3）结尾要表示倡议者的决心和希望。（4）最后要写上发倡议者的名称。 亮点说明范文使用一些如what’s more, besides等承接词进行连接,使文章层次清晰。多变的高级句式如定语从句的使用What’s more, we will collect waste paper, old books, empty cans and old toys, which will be sorted before being sent to the recycling center.及it作形式主语的句型it is better for us to take a bus or walk to school.等；高级词汇和短语的灵活运用，如advocate a low carbon lifestyle，switch off all electric liances，in use，disposable products等 |
